Alice` was standing In line talking with her friends. She had been in line since the cafeteria opened. While she was not paying attention Paige cut in front of her and Alice caught it in the corner of her eye. Alice and Paige had been enemies in the past.
Alice spun around and lashed out to Paige to move to the back but Paige said that she was there first and declined any evidence of cutting in line. Then Alice shouted at Paige to move and that just made things worse Paige was still not moving and Alice was getting really mad. Alice's face was turning as red as a tomato then Paige laughed.
Alice threw a light fist at Paige but her friends held her back. Paige just chuckled. That made Alice even more mad. Then Alice went and told Mr.Martens, and Mr.Martens told Paige that she had to move to the back of the line or she could come with him. Paige did not want to go with Mr.Martens so she apologized and went back to the line. She also thought that it was unnecessary to tell him about the attempted punch.
i like how you described everything that happend
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ReplyDeletei like how you were very specific on how they acted and felt. but you should have used quotation marks
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